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Post by anasa on Jun 3, 2008 10:59:19 GMT -5
*ahem* On another note....yay, twins!  I like these fellas. I also can't help but like how hard-headed Hunter is. XD |
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Post by Arissa Warrner on Jun 3, 2008 11:19:43 GMT -5
((you cant help but like it to start with Anasa, -sighs- i think you like my story more than i like it))
“I-i-i…uhh…well, uhm.” He stuttered slightly, his face paling. Ayanna smiled slightly and looked at Kadin for help. Kadin shrugged his shoulders.
“I-its Jof.” He stuttered. Ayanna turned to his brother
“and yours?” She asked
“Frit.” He said.
“I am Ayanna, this is Kadin and Hunter.” She said, indicating them in turn. “How old are you?”
“We’re 15.” Jof said “will you please let us out?” Frit nodded in agreement.
Ayanna paused and blinked. Then she grinned and put her hand back on the dome. It shrank causing them to be pushed forward with it. Kadin automatically put his hand on his dagger hilt, and then paused. He was going to be nice, for Ayanna.
The twins both tried to not move forward, wanting to stay as far away from Ayanna as possible. With the wall pushing against their backs, they couldn’t help but to move. She stopped shrinking it when they where with in sword-reach.
“Now, I’m going to take this down, don’t run, ok?” Ayanna said, looking at them both. The twins nodded eagerly. Yah right Kadin thought you’ll run as soon as it’s gone. Ayanna released the bound, and they took off running.
“Shield!” Ayanna said. A wall of light again flew up, this time in front of the twins, who scrambled to a stop.
“That’s the second time you’ve done that what is it?” Kadin asked
“Shielding like that is normally an Air magic ability, but War magic can, per say, borrow an ability of a different type. Its can be used to stop armies as well as individuals.” Ayanna said while they watched the twins try to get around the shield.
“You boys stop right there!” Hunter yelled at them in his best City guard Captain voice. They both spun around and stared at him. “Now surrender your weapons and put your hands on you head.” He said. Ayanna stepped up beside him and raised her hand to bend the edges of the shield inward slightly. The twins stared pulling off a few daggers; Frit had a sling that was like Kadin’s. Both then stood staring at them with their hands on their heads. “Now sit down.” Hunter instructed.
They sat down promptly and started whispering to themselves.
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Post by anasa on Jun 3, 2008 11:24:47 GMT -5
And what is that supposed to mean?
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Post by Arissa Warrner on Jun 3, 2008 11:28:42 GMT -5
i donno its just kinda -blinks- odd
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Post by anasa on Jun 3, 2008 11:30:56 GMT -5
What is? The story or my compliments?
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Post by Arissa Warrner on Jun 3, 2008 11:35:17 GMT -5
That you appear to like my story more than i do
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Post by anasa on Jun 3, 2008 11:43:36 GMT -5
Well, you know how I am. If I like something, I go crazy over it. *flashback to eating tons upon tons of sugar on Orchestra trip, going on over the phone about my favorite manga, and other instances of craziness*
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Post by Arissa Warrner on Jun 3, 2008 11:49:19 GMT -5
yes, that would be somthing to keep in mind -shivers-
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Post by anasa on Jun 4, 2008 16:00:40 GMT -5
lol
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Post by Arissa Warrner on Jun 4, 2008 16:12:50 GMT -5
well at least it wasnt crazy like the dream that Olivia had......
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Post by anasa on Jun 4, 2008 16:19:55 GMT -5
o_0 Tell me about it over private messages.
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Post by Arissa Warrner on Jun 7, 2008 14:15:21 GMT -5
Kadin walked over to them unnoticed until he was standing in front of them.
“Are you going to tie us up?” Frit asked
“No are you going to be good?” Kadin said in reply.
“Y-yes but what are you going to do with us?” Jof said.
“I think that’s up to Ayanna.” Kadin said. Both twins looked at Ayanna, who was standing just out of earshot, talking to Hunter happily, assured that Kadin had things under control. Her hand still upraised to hold the shield was the only thing still holding her attention to them. The twins gulped.
“B-but she’s a h-h-host!” They said at the same time. “S-she’ll do…!” They stopped talking as Kadin held up a hand.
“She will be nice. I promise.” Kadin said. “If you are good.”
Both twins nodded furiously
“Can you make her stop the magic thing?” Jof asked.
“I can ask.” Kadin said picking up their weapons “Ayanna!” He called “you can take the shield down now!”
Ayanna smiled “Fall. You know, Kadin, I’m hungry.” She said “can we stop and eat?” Kadin smiled at Ayanna
“Yes we can.” He said. Then turning to the twins he said “come on, get up.”
The twins got up and followed him over to Ayanna and Hunter. They where hesitant in walking any closer than five feet to her, still nervous.
Ayanna had already pulled some of their food out and a large blanket.
“Hunter will you help me spread this out?” She asked. Hunter took the other end of the blanket.
“Ayanna, where are we going anyway?” He asked.
“We’re going to the Council’s Keep.” Ayanna said. Hunter blanched slightly
“There are winged snakes there, though!” he stuttered.
“Yes, but they are all under control. The council sees to that, plus they all know me. I live at the keep.” Ayanna said smiling. Kadin made a face, sitting down on the blanket
“I’ve heard of the Keep before. I thought it was abandoned.” Kadin said. He looked at the twins “you can sit down.” They sat hesitantly
“Well, it was abandoned for a time. But the current members of the Council decided to start using it as a school for hosts that don’t have teachers. I stumbled on it by accident.” Ayanna said pausing to take a bite of food.
“So it’s open to anyone?” Kadin asked.
“Well, yes and no.” Ayanna said “I know you’ll be fine, but I’m not so sure about you, Hunter.” He made a confused face. “Because you where working for Jrenca.”
“well, I could see that.” Hunter said “if there anything like you, then I’ll be fine.”
Ayanna smiled
“Trieah Warrner grew up living with Shadow Cats.” Ayanna said “And Trieah Raltagold is nice. I guess since they’re the leaders then you’ll be ok.”
Hunter looked surprised “Arissa Warrner and Karce Raltagold?!” Ayanna nodded “B-but they should be dead!”
“Full hosts keep living as long as the years of anything they kill.” Ayanna said. Kadin stared at her amazed and scared.
“Will they…?” Kadin asked. Ayanna quickly shook her head
“no, no they’re not interested in living forever!” Ayanna said “Trieah Warrner wishes that it was not so.”
Jof raised his hand, shakily. Ayanna looked towards him.
“W-what about us?” He asked “what are you going to do with us.”
“I guess they are the more pressing matter.” Hunter said. “since they’re here with us.” The twins glanced at each other
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Post by anasa on Jun 8, 2008 13:26:07 GMT -5
The typo fairy's come to town to point out these mistakes!
"Her hand still upraised to hold the shield was the only thing still holding her attention to them." - You need some commas in here.
"Frit asked" - This needs punctuation.
"They said at the same time." - This needs a comma instead of a period.
"nodded furiously" - This needs punctuation.
"said picking up" - This needs a comma.
"He called" - This needs a comma.
"you can take the shield" - "You" needs to be capitalized.
"She said" - This needs a comma.
"can we stop" - "Can" needs to be capitalized.
"Kadin smiled at Ayanna" - This needs a punctuation.
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Post by arrucard on Jun 8, 2008 13:32:01 GMT -5
May I ask how come I stoped getting updates from the story ? -_-#
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Post by anasa on Jun 8, 2008 19:08:37 GMT -5
I did, too. But, I can read it here, so I'm not complaining.
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I like these fellas.
